Editor and proofreader sorely needed. Reads like a second or third draft, not a finished one. Fortunately the writing is usually clear enough to mentally rewrite as I read so the riveting story doesn't get bogged down by it. The character reveals are well paced and development is clear in both the characters and the story. Lots of surprise twists mixed in with a natural progression of the plot. All in all, a story worth throwing most of my free passes at while saving my coins up to deal with cliffhangers and insatiable curiosity moments (lots of those, I admit). A story well worth many hours of my attention, and hopefully yours as well. {^θ^}
The MC don't act like a 89 years old man who has experience playing VR like. his stats are infinite and saying that he needs to grow the heck??
Oh boy, is this gonna be a doozy. Where do I even start? Ok the fact that it's a soul transformation makes it interested with the 2 people having the same aliases. The premise is all around a spot on but the fact that it's a cultivation novel (i.e. when I say cultivation I mean it feels like it.) The author could use a bit of polishing as the grammar sometimes bugs me. Get an editor if you can man. Other than that just keep going until you reached the end goal mate.
Hey author-san, good book you have here. The story is really captivating and has a lot of potential for future chapters. However you seem to prefer uploading on wattpad. Please don't forget us webnovel readers here ? . Do upload soon. Fingers crossed ? you'll find your writing motivation quickly. Good luck.
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I liked the novel. I particularly liked that it was not rushed. The Background was correct. I love reading basketball novels. I want to read more like this. Don't stop
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I’ve only read to chapter 15ish but I like the story already....every chapter I read, the pace and excitement in the story picks up.So this guy is forced to be ‘friends’ with some mean people and one day storms off and went missing blah blah blah then his parents send him and 7 other kids to this one dreamworld (a video game like place where people who where special headbands when they sleep can go) where he gets a special pet and starts his journey as a traveller (pets or comrades do all the work for you) he faces a few minor challenges then these random green armoured dudes show up searching for the 8 of them for some reason and they manage to temporarily escape by a hair......idk wuts next but it’s better than I can explain it.
This is the worst novel i have read so far in webnovel, if it was possible to give a 0 for the score, i would have done it.The first 10 chapters are good but it's just a trap...
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Im honestly surprised this got on trial reads, the writing styles bland and the story is full and full of cliches with under average plots and slow developments, not surprised this wasnt chosen