"Do you remember me?" she asked, stepping forward again. Xun was very curious to know how his mother knew her. The girl had very striking eyes, that he had never seen on any other person, maybe that was it?
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I lifted my head to look at Agnes, and i saw her staring into the distance with wide eyes. She floated on the spot without any explanation why so.
"Eh?"
"What in the heave-..."
Cavin went around talking to everyone and so did the others but when Cavin went to talk to The Desuza's, he was mesmerized by Anna's beauty and instead of talking to them he kept staring her until his brother noticed and pulled him back to his senses breaking the ice between them he said "This is my brother Cavin, I am sorry for his strange behavior."
And we walked towards the museum entrance and what greeted my sight was a building akin to a school, just on a smaller case.
Well ,I have completed the first chapter and I liked it . Looking forward to read the rest
Wonderful! It's nicely paced, the writing flows well. I love how the first three chapters conveyed this sense of motherly love for Malaki from his mother. It was absolutely well written. So immersive that you can feel a bit of sympathy for a fictional character. Lovely!
Hey, it's me, statue here! Since I've written the novel and know how it goes, it's all going to be a 5-star for me(I might be a little biased), but I understand it might not be the same for you. This is my first time serializing any of my works, so the pacing and character POVs might feel a little off, but I hope to improve as I go.The worldbuilding, though, will be something you greatly enjoy, and I'll continue expanding it while keeping our MC as grounded and realistic as possible. Thanks again for giving SCS a chance! You guys are awesome!peace, Statue.
Nice start, keep up the good work author ??
Not like it?don’t want to read more…how can be a mother like this