Very well written. I never read a racing novel before. I hope there will be lots of racing scenes in addition to the beast system scenes! Thanks.
author your book is so nice but you need to update more often because you are getting many many more reads you need to update more often because I love you smoke so much and I cannot wait two to three weeks for you to just upload one chapter I have school
This is my second original novel, I will be improving the content of the chapters as I write the novel. The more active you are, the more chapters I will publish. I hope you enjoy it!
-A decent, albeit cliche, premise. -A generic daily check in style system that always gives an item he'll need. I find myself thinking about what I would do on each room instead of what the dumb MC does. It's not that the MC is stupid, he is just slow and reckless. No thoughts, head empty, but not stupid. I hope that makes sense.Other than the middle of the road plot and cookie-cutter characters the quality of the writing is nice.
An interesting premise that is completely ruined by the translation. I have read MTL before and this novel seems to be a tier below it. Nothing is capitalized, grammar is all over the place, people change names every sentence, it's just not worth piecing together this puzzle. If you're going to upload a translation, the least you could do is try.
Fantastic! This story is great and awesome! I love to read more chapters please author release more chapters please please please please please please
I have only just started reading this novel so I can’t comment on much, but I have noticed something I think the author should know. The writing in chapter 8 is pretty awkward. I could tell something was off in the previous chapters but I wasn’t able to pin point it until now. I finally realized the problem while reading the fight scenes of chapter 8. The tense frequently switches from past tense to present tense. One of the main rules in writing is to choose a tense and stick with it. Otherwise it makes the pacing of each scene feel all messed up and off. Going back and editing all of the chapters with conflicting tenses and converting them all into past tense would make the story flow a lot smoother and improve the general quality of the writing. I recommend past tense because it is the one more suited to this kind of story. If you would like specific examples of where I think these problems are and could be improved. I would be happy to help.
Imma give a 5 star cuz the author writes great smut, I was honestly expecting this book to be the same as his previous ones like ghost of culture or very disney ghostly, i really enjoyed those.Ngl im kinda disappointed that it wasn’t like those books but the book still good regardless .I do hope you update disney ghoStly again, it was fun and hot and im running out of smut to read. ALMOST out.
"Too Much Unnecessary Drana"I've read up to 100+ chapters andWell i've had enough, it's sad because i quite liked this novel but i got fed up with the drama and it was starting to frustrate me and wasn't enjoying the read anymore......
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it's a rip off of jay arslan but not as good, it's still a pretty good read. I just hope it won't be dropped. .
I am giving an excellent review hoping that this great novel gets selected soon. For a change it is refreshing to see the main character getting bullied in a harmless way. Looking forward to regular updates in the future.