An Sun's face was incredibly pale, nearly transparent without a trace of color, while his lips were colorless and cracked. A few stray locks of damp black hair clung to his sweaty face. His chest rose slowly with rugged and tremulous breaths.
"Thank you!"
"What kind of favors could my ancestors have been owed?" Anna questions in awe.
Players has levelled up to Level 9!
Good Fantasy story, Love it!. I always like fantasy stories, this story can take the reader into a fantasy world in the story. with the creatures told in the story, it makes those who read it able to imagine.
Nice story ......interesting ......?????
don't stop writing this is a hidden gem. don't drop it i want read what happens next to the wilson family and aunt miya and eternal ice empress.
An interesting work which is quite a bit different from the other novels involving a system.It's a bit refreshing to see an MC who's not looking to dominate the rankings or the market. Overall a good read and definitely worth a try.
Thank you. Great book, loving the progress from simple person, receiving gift that changes life. Then progression to cultivating and leadership . Helping others along the way .
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this story is going great.i am always waiting for new chapters. new writer new content. presentation style is also different than others??
The remarks listed below can be seen as suggestions rather than glaring mistakes. They are quite subjective in character and merely portray my idea of the aspects of your work that have the potential to become more. This, however,- does not mean that I find your writing to be lacking. Quite on the contrary: when placed against other stories here on web novel, and I certainly do not exclude my own leisure storytelling, I find that your writing is certainly above the medium. Nor do I claim to have the ability to successfully tend to the remarks made below in my own work,- I merely hope to tell you, to the best of my ability, how it is to read your story.Firstly, I am a reader that wishes to be submerged into the scene. You already greatly succeeded in this in most scenes, but unfortunately, it is - abruptly so - entirely lost in others scenes. I know you have the ability, and would greatly enjoy seeing this in every single scene you create. The dialogue is decent and engaging, and I seldom feel as if the dialogue is obligatory and forced. I do not, however, enjoy the sound effects. I have come to find that many disagree with this, but in my personal opinion; they sound juvenile. Incredibly so. To the point that it disturbs the flow of your story which you have so carefully build. Again, this is very personal, and it has been often brought to my attention that this is quite a controversial point. Concerning the characters, I believe them to be entertaining but they don’t pique my interest in any particular way. I sympathise with them, but ever so often I fail to completely grasp them, and I lose the psychological character I had build of them in my head.Overall, I sincerely believe you did a good job. I enjoyed reading your story and look forward to seeing more of you in the future.