It tore one of its feathers and put it on his hand!
colbob:h…how.. its a frightening ultimate skill indeed. but im invincible so
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"Nice!" exclaimed Lily, who saw us and went her way over to us while I was practicing pushing and pulling it. Link was also pleased with the results. "Very good. Keep going like this and you'll master it in no time!"
This novel is insanely satisfying the characters , the world design , the story , the vibes everything is made for quality I really liked it .
One of the very few good "kingdom building" novels on Webnovel.
I don't think I could get enough of this book & it's characters
Keep up the hard work! I love when authors update regularly
I always leave five stars on books because as a writer, it's the only thing I could do to support other ones. But for you, it's kind of a well-deserved five stars since your book really shows promise. It's a great read!I'm not going to lie, your book is really immersive but there are a few things that you could still improve on, albeit minor ones: First, you could improve on your information. Don't rush things such as the evolver levels. You shouldn't have done that in chapter five since it would only look lazy to other readers. I've written books with power ranking before and it's always easy to snippet explanations during the story and work your way from there. like "Wow! You're a universal?! That's the highest rank anyone could get! I'm only a Level 9 evolver so I don't know." or something like that. And then from there, work on explaining the other ranks in the next chapters until the readers get a vague idea on it. When it comes to writing, it's always best to even out your information so your readers will always be engaged, not releasing massive amounts of info on one chapter and then no new information on the next. That way, your readers would consistently ask themselves what's going to happen next and continue reading. It's still a constant improvement for me though hehe. Second: Grammar, there were parts where you said "didn't me(e)t" or x369('s) whole body (I included the correct forms in brackets). These are only minor mistakes but readers can get particular about it. I know it sucks not having an editor but you could always avail of apps like Grammarly that would help you with your small grammatical errors. These are only minor mistakes though so you only need a little bit of improvement. Honestly, though, your vocabulary is really awesome and I know you'll get far when it comes to writing. (I also like anime, web novel, webtoons, light novels, mangas, dramas, etc etc ehehe so I relate to ya. Cheers!) I'd suggest going through your chapters when you have free time and just edit it. I do it sometimes but I still miss like a lot of minor mistakes. Phew~!Third: Dialogues. I don't know if it's just your writing style but putting a comma after dialogues is new to me. I've never seen anyone do it and for a good reason. I guess there are etiquettes when it comes to writing dialogues... I'm not sure but it doesn't look professional. Now don't misunderstand. I like your book, I even added it to my library since it's very promising. I hope you don't find any of my reviews as offensive but as a means to improve your skills. I want to support your book as much as I could since I really like it. Keep on writing, keep on improving, and keep on moving forward, because that's what authors do. ^ ^ I know you'll make it big someday. Good luck!
Let me be honest the Grammer is unbearable the simplest of mistakes are made and ruins the flow of the novel the author seems to not care much to remember what he just wrote down then says or does something the same a few paragraphs later the MC is really dumb for a dude that was the best scientist author could be bothered to re read his work let alone remeber if he wrote down “looks at hands and they seem bigger” then MC goes and looks in water to see hes red like what
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(Review at 20 chapters) Writing Quality - Pretty good.Update Stability - MehStory Development - Story is extremely confusing, one time MC is a zombie and another time he is not a zombie and is trying to fight and beat the virus please make up your mind author??Character Design - MC is stupid for no reason i am starting to think author made him stupid on purpose World Background - not much is mentioned about this within 20 chapters besides zombie outbreak overall: pretty good story with a stupid MC (hopefully his IQ improves) am i going to keep reading ?? Absolutely because i have nothing to read atm so i might as well burn my brain cells and be a monkey for the rest of the 200+ chapters (funny even if i have 0 brain cells i am still smarter then MC kek)