Only 14 chapters so far but it has already gotten me hooked. The story is a bit slow-paced, but honestly, I think it's worth getting through as it allows for steady character and world-building and as a result, the author is painting us a much better picture of the world they've envisioned.
Fastpass is going to be there for a while
It is a very very well made story and world plot building. The characters are also lovely and as fine as they can be... it's truly a work of art ...I can say for certain that it can compete with "My three wives are beautiful vampires" should the author sharpen his/her overall skill just half a level ..Now although I am not an author but I like to say that Nyx loved his dear adopted son so much thus if she meets him a few more times when he is alone it should be better that only happened at the start of the story.... and let us know more about Nyx, her inner thoughts, desire and charector ....Hehe I won't say much but there is my inner desire to see Nyx and MC falling in a deeper relationship than adopted mom-son ....and the author can you please give the chart of power levels like immortal - god - primordial etc. I am very interested to know
Very clear writing style and world building. It's one of if not the best novel I have read for now. The plot and character are absolutely perfect. It's clearly a gem among the novel of this platform.
This story does have potential. But there are some problems that I find. If the author reads these hopefully he can answer some of my question that I have. For the record I am caught up to the latest chapter and will continue reading for sure. For the Writing Quality theres alot of grammatical errors and misspelled words that do need to be fixed. English might not be their first language and that's totally cool but theres alot that need to be updated. Story Development is interesting but it feels like a train with no brakes. Very fast paced. This isn't a bad thing but keep in mind that your Character Development bbn and World Building could suffer from the pace your setting. You arent even 100 Chapters in and it feels like he already God level. I believe the story would benefit more if there more time spent on him training his and other powers so we understand everyone's power level. This goes hand in hand with Character Design. Everyone feels flat. Secrecy is good but we know next to nothing about the MCs friend or Best Friend. Nor do we know why William is the way he is. Emma seems to be the classic soft hearted healer. She, in my opinion could be more of a personality or just different. Alice is also very flat so far. Is she suppose to be a companion? is she just a glorified assistant? I have a feeling that she could be so much more, such as taking the initiative and using her animal forms. The MC himself also need a bit more design. Especially when is comes to his background and the World background in general. What happened to his parents and family? What is his motivation to obtain power? What about him makes him be worthy to obtain a Pure Soul? Not to mention this Acedemy. Is it special? How is the MC able to go to a Acedemy even though hes an orphan? The back ground need a lot more fleshing out. Such as the the Countries on Earth. What is the Federation? What's the big deal about the 5 Great Families? What's society and the Government like? What role does the Association play in the Government? Where is the setting of the story? US? Europe? Asia? Or because of how the Calamities changed the landscape, is there even any old Governments left? I feel like so far that the story is sprinting on and not pausing the look at the scenery.
The storyline is uniquely similar to a few I have seen but not quite seemes as tho the MC is an orphan who's worlds shifts and reborn in the game simulation if I am not wrong.. I don't play games.. U have explained things clearly but at some moments it gets a little confusing.The vocab used is amazing There are very little to almost non grammatical mistakes only found a 'Th' and if I am correct 2-3 words writen wrongly? Hum yesh. The way u express each action taking place gives the reader ig more info on what's taking place.the characters seem to be really self centered a bit and open shamelessly ahem.. And seem to have some issues anger.. To excited with makes me wanna smack them to shut them up but can't but they are over all most seem to have a good chemistry good character base to be exact.Over all its a great story bub demm... Your imagination is out of the league... But over all its truly fascinating.Byebye author-shi it was fun reading :)
This is quite a great novel not fast paced or slow paced. The plot is quite thick and mc is not OP from the start it seems like his powers have 9 seals for now he unlocked his 2nd one he can type 100 lines of codes he also started to cultivate his in the first stage 2nd lvl or gate whatever it looks like he is good friends with the clans head daughter its not of the stage where there is love i hope that it does develope there soon mc started to cultivate late in his age but he recoded his body to gather qi a LOT faster so he should be able to catch with other people mc is lvl headed i like that a lot i just hope he is not dense and i hope for a harem xD
This is not a merchant novel but a **** novel,I cant read it anymore, the story is about *** and ***,. And the business development is lame.
This novel is so bad.I almost can’t be assed to write a review, it’s just frustrating thinking about this novel.I’ll narrow it down, the mc is meant to be a killer but he doesn’t act like one at all, he is a delivery man at first yet he has a lot of ability in this world where strength seems to be very important, he claims it’s because it’s impossible to get a job yet he doesn’t mind hanging out with the local gangs and helping them out? He has multiple ways to make money don’t tell me a person who kills people who money is now against taking protection fees.The worst thing is probably the way the novel is so backwards. When people come for his life he’ll let them off with a verbal warning. If it’s an attractive women she’ll even get an appreciative nod in approval.I’ve had enough of this novel the main character thinks only with his lower half and can spend paragraphs thinking about a ladies large breast; Snow White skin or long legs, it made my eyes bleed.
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Nice story. I'm really getting addicted. Need more chapters
I got a friend who recommended me this book and darn he was right! This book is filled with so many mysteries and so many thrills! Cant wait for the future updates!