Your book has great description and excellent verbiage. However, it lacks substance. Each chapter has so much exposition casually explained that it feels forced.Ch2 is Silas talking, demonstrating his magic to no one.Ch3 is talking, establishing Silas' overcautious nature and Saya being forward.Ch4 +2 characters, more talking.Ch5 is talking and more magic exposition.Almost nothing substantial happens, Author.Compare this to the prologue. Terrified scientist goes teleports 8 bodies away. Baddie shows up, taunts him and beats him. There is suspense, strong emotion, and extreme actions of a desperate spellcasting and a villainess beating a defenseless person.I advise you hold off on providing so much exposition, so many characters. Give us 1 or 2 and provide an active conflict where you can demonstrate their abilities, their personalities, their goals and motivations.As a reader, I'd prefer to discover exposition than be told. Instead of 'all the humans are dead' I'd rather hear Huxley's tortured screams, full of rage and despair, cursing Leviathan for her and her people's cruel genocide. The characters' abilities could be revealed in action scenes instead of briefly explained.World events can be conveyed through character conversation, like you did with the ferals. Also, Silas has no personality except that he's distrustful and hides from girls.Thanks for writing. I hope my relatively harsh review won't dissuade you from continuing as a writer. You have some very cool, I daresay "novel" concepts that have a lot of potential. I look forward to your growth. Let's work hard together, Author.
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I just love your overall style and how you put this together. The op Mc, other characters that this system can apply to, also the fact that one of his close friends is a spy. I love the story and keep up the good work.
Being the first work of the author, I must say I am highly impressed. The world building and character design went beyond my expectations. A very good book to be precise.
Seems like another case of the ********** invasion but less dramatic.Know your place fools.No one can fight against the biggest book company in China.No one.Feelsbadman.Also stop rating so low because it makes the book look bad when it actually isn't.
Didn´t expect the MC to be this dumb. Hopefully this mountain of sh*t of a novel doesn´t get picked. Anyways stay safe and keep away from this.
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The correct way cultivation books should be written. Hoping for new chapters.
This is actually sad. This was one of the novels I was excited for but it's way too rushed. Story is basically random. So disappointing????
alli can say is great as novel it is better than most upgrade apocalypse novels can be said to be close to the top the translation is also good theres no super patriotism and it dosent only focus on asia(like the ones on trial read or pilot) and the mc is actually maturing from being naive instead of staying a bad xianxia mc wich goes looking for trouble
Hmm... Nice book I hope it updates frequently. I could really feel her masters anger I really wanna know the dudes name though although "her master" is pretty cool