NU veterans say this novel is among their favourite CN novels, and they said the novel is really BRUTAL!!! Apart from that I heard that it's a Wuxia not a Xianxia meaning no immortals n only martial arts fighting! Waitin for this one!!!!
Overall its good the story developed in a good way but the way he train is just insane and it feelLike he would be a pro already but I know that its a fantasy ich novel so it just bugging me and I dont mind it that much. I know people commented on the grammar but it really suck and I knew it is hard to write english too cuz English my second language. Like I get the overall sentence and stuff cuz I read google translation chinese novel. It just need a bit of editing sentence strcuture and it will be good, so if you trust me I would like to edit your work for you.
Not enough world back ground I feel like this is a mix of full metal alchemist world with the seven deadly sins homunculus but there called the seven nightmares. .... many stolen names and ideas from other famous creators shows that you could have just made up yourself to save the trouble. Literally have one punch man written word for word in your novel bro that’s just plain stealing. Forced plot of moving from one organization to another to fast no consistent power scaling literally everyone is at the same power level. Trash mc being put through so much stressed to further your plot cause you don’t know how to write a story just about him. Too many full metal alchemist rip offs what was the point of having all his arms and legs ripped off bro do you know what phantom limb pain does to you I don’t care how strong. A rapper is you should be going through something when you forcibly get your limb cut off.Dad forced to die Cause no one orginization can keep him safe for long. My advice to you is stop stealing sit down for a second and make your own story bro cause I’ve read it somewhere else
Im gonna level, the intro on this story... isnt great. The pace is great (rare for a WN, so good job) and the characters have a nice foundation; but I cant believe it, for an disaster novel it lacks authenticity. There are so many cases where common sense flies out the window and the established world rules are disregarded (any scene involving the elevator is just a big box of stupid). Its like Im reading a first draft of an inexprinced author; this being a WN I’m probably not wrong. A second draft or editor would improve things drastically on this front, but its not unreadable by even by WN standards. Just dont think to hard about the technical side of the world building.Beyond that Theres... GoodThe premise is interesting, the tension is present, and it has great growth potential for both the story and author. BadA bit heavyhanded with the early messages, could have been done in a more natural way, lots of telling but little showing (chapter 4/5 is mostly just infodumps), The characters all start off as stupid. The MC in particular leaps past dense and dashes for the label of braindead. Thats ignoring his moral compass and naivr begining.Its far from a masterpiece on an execution basis; but the author has enough ideas to make it an interesting, if occasionaly infurating, ride.
next update pls...
nice book....i like reading it
A must read for everyone in search of a fulfilling read
Hello everyone, a chapter came out as a duplicate will inform my editor to change it asap, sorry for the confusion
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You should go ahead and give it a read. It is well written and witty. My favourite so far from the Alpha series and definitely one of my favorites on this app.
I really enjoy story so far and can't wait for the next chapter! Your book entertain me during my boring days. Keep it up, author <3 Do you perhaps have any social media that I can follow you on?