I really love your work, please continue this one. It was getting better in later chapters, please don't drop this unlike the 1st one..
Liked the story idea, had great potential but it's wayyyyy too slow. At chapter 43 she has barely done anything. Gone to a dojo hasn't done anything special and when she gets to the shadow realm she stays inside a cave for like 5 chapters cooking. Whats more disappointing is that she is meant to have completed every game in her country but she seems like a noob that conveniently remembers things now and then. Im out peace, gl with the story
Just thought about a rough idea today, and decided to try writing this. To me, it's a form of practice, where I'll be able to freely express all the adjectives and descriptions that I had just learned. And of course, I'm going to give myself 5 stars :)
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His little sister and Tong Yuan or whatever ruins it..........................."..........................
I do see the potential of this novel as well as the ideas it presents. However, the writing quality needs some refinement. I understand the overall points of each chapter and the messages of what the characters are trying to present to the reader, however, the early chapters in particular feel like a giant exposition dump. It's not that the information isn't useful, but I think it's way too early to drop them early on. Basically, show and not tell. Some parts that are meant to be told are executed fine, but the rest of the showing elements need to be refined. I know you can do better author, and at the number of chapters you have at the moment, this is a good opportunity for you to refine it and make it better in the future.
This is a good novel. The characters aren't too annoying. The writing quality is quite good. No grammar issues. It's good way to pass some time
webnovel really hides it's stuff deeply, I've been looking for something tho read for days but i just tapped something while not looking and boom I got something else besides what they're trying to shove down my throat
Good read. Long but worth it. The characters are well written, with very little to no plot armor. Characters have flaws which is important, as flawless characters are boring. Can’t wait to read more of your work in the shared universe.
If you’re a fan of slow paced levelling where the author is deliberately slowing his leveling then this is the novel for you.Because spoiler alert the mc is somehow still level 15 after 250 chapters and doesn’t bother levelling up even after being told that his entire planet is gonna be invaded by 8 different civilisation.The monologues are annoying and long winded, the author can spend 100 chapters to tell the same story he did in 250 but he’s milking the viewers as greedy webnovel authors usually do.There’s also a lot of useless info dumps and a dumb and plot armor childhoof GF that acts like an 8 year old child that’s being burdened by the MC as if he’s looking after a handicapped child.Basically the first 50 chapters where interesting but the author managed to somehow turn this novel into fillers slow pace where 1 day in the story is 3 months of waiting for the reader untill the chapters release
here author sama you said you wanted a rewiew so here it is so far the story is well written and i'm enjoying it and i'm waiting for more chapters the descriptions are good and the world creation is excellent but I didn't really like the "schemes" of some characters but that's just my personal taste and i have some questions for you author sama Could you give a description of the appearance of the protagonists?and is ama love the protagonist's love interest? and a suggestion? perhaps? I just want to talk about a power that I think is cool and that I wanted to see in history the weakest affinity of the protagonist is time, right? but I would really like if the protagonist uses temporal powers
I wasn't expecting anything tbh since I've read too many novels already. I won't say its completely New as I don't know every existing novel but it's a breath of fresh air to me and I would absolutelty recommend it