I like the story a bit although there are inconsistencies in the story the characters aren't bad but they could use some the only real big issue that I have with the story are the repeating of chapter later onthat's the only big issue I have come across. Minor issue being that it doesn't feel like the MC is really having developed as a character in the story.Still I would come back to read this story at a later date and hope these issues get fixed.
It's the novel with the best world-building that I've found on this app. It has good humour, not cringe s***, and you have a good time even if you only read a chapter. The author seems to read most of the comments and listens to reader's questions and doubts. Not only this is an 10/10 novel, but it also has a 10/10 author.
Hello guys, I am the author of the work and of course, I am obliged to give 5 Stars because the work and me (-_-).I have been thanking you in advance for any support you are giving me and if possible leave comments, even if they are insults about my horrible writing, senseless dialogues and so on, I am completely open to such things and I really want you to say such things, so that I can improve in the future.And about the release of chapters, I'll try to keep an average of 4~7 Chapters per week, so don't forget to comment and donate some pebbles to Lich here, it always encourages content creators like me.
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I love the story and it's awesoneI would recommend for anyone to read this.I.love all the novels in this app.Thank you for sharing great novels
He is literally a Son of a *** Simp can't even reject a Girl that he not loves to not become his Wife..All Simp Author go to h. .ell.?
The typical alternate universe novel where the mc uses the works of his past world to make it big but I liked it more than I thought I would and i quite recomend this novel usually this trope gets old but this novel made me reignite my passion a little for these tropes it's not even comparable as to how much I liked it years ago but it's good also dont take this novel too seriously it's not ment to be taken seriously just relax on what ever bed you have put on some relaxing music or whatever to make you relaxed and not too tense or irratated by what's going on in your life and read the novel
I think your writing is pretty good, just a couple of complaints and that is in the translation, confusing genders. I may suggest that you get an editor to assist you. I am at chapter 12 and the story line is very good. I sincerely hope you do not decide to drop the story.
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The story has potenital But you can't make a bunch of OP pover in novelHe is demon in human body and has a higest cultivatio grade And thats okey and niceBut the problem is sistemSistem is too muchAnd story development is too fast He has a strong body And has a seled meridians Its a good startBut he didint get hunted by king or sectAnd he is calamity There si a lot of thing that need do remake 1. Take a slover pace Dont go to fast with story 2. He is to smart He dosen't have a comon sense. Thats okey but later he went to mental sect way/where noting is explained 3. You have to litle desprition about some thingI read it till you did start with a systemI didint read it laterBut this is my honest optionI know that you are 13 old So dont take offens but take a slover pace and read some novelWach how other autors write ther novelAlso read a coment Trust me you can learn a lot Of cos read a good coment where readers a brutaly honest and a spamsMy native isitn english Do a dont wach a gramars As long a can read it and unerstandIm okeyDont take offens but i belive if you want to be a beter author Then you need to work a lot
For an SAO parody...This isn't bad. The Kirito here seems better if you ask me. The VR logic is somehow vague for me at first but then I understood it after reading a bit far off onto chapter 20.But overall, This puts a smile on my face ;)