Whispers of Desire ( JakkuSen ) - Reviews

8 parts romance 2 parts story.Story started off really well, but eventually turned into a novel where MC turns out to be a flirtatious Alpha who can't keep it in his pants.MC joins the army but unlike what you'd expect, the new recruit is given an unlimited amount of freedom to do whatever he wants. It doesn't feel like the army at all and instead feels like a summer camp for teens with pent up hormones. Every new recruit in the army is thinking about hooking up with each other. There's no regulations at all.Up until the first new planet the story is pretty good. MC finds his soulmate and everything seems like as long as they can stay together everything will work out one way or another. Author does find a way to tear them apart though and what does MC do first once they're apart? Find another girl. The rebound was insanely fast. After that girl, he gets another girl, and once he drops that girl he gets another. This is all while comparing the new girls to the first one that he's still in love with. It's just a complete mess. The excuse was that he has his own urges and is really just looking for someone to satisfy them. It really doesn't help that every attractive girl he comes across instantly falls for him. I dropped around chapter 400 since it wasn't going anywhere else.

Must read. 90.000 year cultivation is better than other million year cultivation novel, the MC is mature and speak less. He like painting, thats why the novel took a lot of chapter just to describe little on going event.

REALLY REALLY fun read. I read all of the available chapters in one night and could not take my eyes away. Great progression speed. great characters, great world building. I would recommend everyone give the book a try. WELL worth your time.

The idea is not bad at all. The biggest problem I have with this is writing quality (grammar and such, that's why I only put 3 stars for writing quality). Some sentences are completely incoherent. Author, you really need editor to check and fix your text (it seems you're not native English speaker).I could help, but it's not my native language as well, so you'd better ask/look for someone anyway.

This is a review of the first four chapters.  In this story, the main character takes a detour on the way home from school and ends up in a supernatural world.  He then desperately tries to escape from this supernatural world, but he keeps being pulled back. The plot is scary, but the numerous run-on sentences and other grammatical mistakes dull the shock.

Yes, It is yet another shameless author -_-Since it is my first novel, please be understanding about the quality of writing, I am certain that I have improved as I continue writing especially after the ascension (minor spoiler :] )Any questions you may have, comment and I’ll do my best to satisfy your queriesHope you enjoy the book, please make reviews so I know what I am doing right and what I can get better at

Enzo opened his eyes and saw himself in a completely blank space.

"Just wait for me by a cash register ... That way we can leave together.."

The Prince shakes his head and says " Maybe less, I hired someone that can take us there with Giant Millipedes "

Técnicas:

"Fine you set out now" King Cold thought for a bit and agreed because as told earlier Frost demons care for glory and power but not their own kind and King Cold seeing that he can't get Sycamore to Frieza force doesn't really care he will kill him if he refuses but Sycamore had a profitable idea that will cost neither King Cold nor Frieza anything while they earn money so why not

The 'planet' started to spin and soon formed a small pyramid. As it finished forming it started to race between planets and galaxies, it seems  it was searching for something. And in the time it took a cup of tea to boil it found it destination, a planet with a beautiful landscape, as it locked on to the planet the pyramid started to decrease in size. It started to increase in speed as if to destroy the planet.