I think this story is something that many would enjoy. Action packed with loads of information right off the bat. Me personally i prefer the show don't tell standard and having mystery and things revealed over time. I think if you don't and simply want a straight forward narrative this is definitely the story.
To me the weakest part is the combat scenes sometimes the timing is slightly off, this is typically due to the wording sometimes being past tense then referring to actions that should have already happened ex. saying a character dashed forward with an attack, then in the next line saying he grabbed his sword and dashed forward, that time of thing.
All in all I could see many people enjoying this novel, so keep it up author.