VRMMORPG: Cosmic Order - Reviews

I am the author of this novel, and other authors have inspired me to review my own story by reviewing their stories. I like my novel, obviously, since I am writing it. And I am being shameless, very shameless, in writing this.

Now, here is some unreliable spoilers about the story.
Everything will make no sense!
The world, which is Earth, will grow twenty times its normal size. (That actually doesn't sound like a bad idea.)
I promise there will be lots of good food!
I promise I will have at least one character eat a Tomato in honor of IEAT TOMATOES!
And I will try and post 7 chapters a week!

There is no cover, why is there no cover! Anyway, I read it and it seems to be kind of action packed. However, there is not enough chapters! Moar! needs 140 characters... 140 140 140.

Okay so, cards on the table, I haven’t read this story yet. I gave a rating just to comment cause I’m not sure where else I should put this but here goes:
Dear Author, darling, honey, sweetheart you need to fix the grammar in your summary. It doesn’t flow well and sounds mighty awkward this can drive people off your story making them less inclined to even give it a go.
Don’t get me wrong I think it’s super cool of you to put your stuff out there for others to read this is just a tip for reference. Good luck!

wooo nice history, i need more chapterss good job!!!
its kind of weird history but its great, i hope to see the family in cosmic order........

I dont know but feel, "what a weird story"..............................  ...                     ........




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Please Sensei, I'm confused on the ranking. Me: Whats better??? Ruby or Sapphire?!?!?! Also please fix it a bit since information is appearing in everywhere and i dont know how to read them properly since i dont know why

Writing Quality: The grammar is little confusing and the author made pretty much a lot of mistake while writing

Stability of updates: Don't know if the author is still writing this story he probably quit after 23 chapter

Story development: it's fine not too bad but what I'm not satisfy in this story is the character habit in scratching their head's seriously? If the author decide to continue this story I suggest him don't make them scratch their head's too often

Character design: not bad the only problem is the enemies their facing are a little limited in names for example a rat named Mouse mickey are you serious? XD and I saw change a girl name from Violet to Chrissy whats wrong with violet?

World development: Pretty good using a VR technology to cultivate their strength for survival from the haze.

Lol cultivation and system haha combination of stories sounds amazing i gonna read this first then review again hahahahahha 1283892919 140 characters more characters can't post characters chatacters

Playing in a real VRMOORPG world. Kinda like Shuras Wrath and King of the Battlefield. Different POVs not only focused on grinding of the mc etc.Seems promising hoping for consistent content.

keep it up :)
good story
hehehe