The writing quality is actually pretty high in this book, cant say much about world building as it just started but.
It seems promising.
Now a few tips that i think could help are that, you probably shouldnt add any type of romance. With it not really making sense as the Mc is another species. And dont add a female Paragon as it will just feel forced and
ruin the story. Also dont make the protagonist a hero or antihero that tries to save the world. Because i feel like its getting over used and wouldnt match the Mc personality. Now he dosent have to be a villain either. He could just be willing to do what it takes for his goal.
But overall i like where the story is going.??