Unwanted feeling - Reviews

First of all, I’m going to point out that this story is around 70% action and 30% mystery. If you’re looking for action-packed scenes and descriptive fights, then this story’s for you.Other than that, I love the world-building you did in the beginning and as the story continues. The plot is eventful and interesting, but it feels like a lot of the mystery is already spoiled since it tells you who the bad guy is (but idk there might be more to the story that hadn’t been revealed yet). The supernatural abilities are placed well in the combat, though it might be nice to see them used outside of fights. The characters have nice interactions and there is a strong female lead, but you could give them clearer and more distinct personalities.The major issue is probably that you should work on your punctuation, sentencing, and paragraphing. Your word choice is great but there’s a lot you can improve.But overall, I love where the story’s going and I can’t wait for more!

Boring. It's just another simulation novel. The twist isn't even a twist at all. Effectively, the MC's name is swapped with someone else in the simulation. Just another power up fic.

This is a well written, if slightly plain story so far.  I like it.  It's a nice casual read.This is a well written, if slightly plain story so far.  I like it.  It's a nice casual read.This is a well written, if slightly plain story so far.  I like it.  It's a nice casual read.

Great 40-50 chapters (just 40 for translation quality) before the author sends us all to the 'wonderful' country of evil foriegners who hate yet admire the glorious people of china. This isn’t even the 'mild' racism/nationalism you’re used to…

I barely read FL because some people tend to make the female weak and all about romance so I am glad you did not make her weak. There are some grammar mistakes and remember that periods and question marks go inside dialogue not outside of it. I like the characters interactions, it is lighthearted and fun. Your story is very insteresting and knows to keep a person reading. Keep up the good work!

Great mc has a very real personality that shines. Also, so far the world building has been well flushed out and very creative can’t wait for more ??

LORD OF ENIGMA AND UBUME BIRD WAS NOT PICKED!CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU!

Two chapters were enough to lure me, the setting, the characters and story and thriller was soooo.goooood and very well done,gonna add this library no dount.

Nope nope nope nope. First chapter alone the amount of grammar mistakes makes me want to gouge my eyes out. This is a non native english speaker and maybe a terrible translator with it. Either missing words so you have to go back and read sentence again for it to kind of make sense or they just don't make any sense at all

"Hey there, Charlotte!" Wang Jinyu greeted her cheerfully.

"Good to see you're conscious. Can you wiggle your toes for me?"

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