I would just state out the author's problem1. author needs to create a long chapter, maybe 1k to 1.5k words per chapter2. if the author is seeking a contract, he should really stop using emoticons3. author needs to work on paragraphs and spacingaside from all these, the story is quite interesting, and I won't lie I'm really a fan of history, but the author needs to work on his writing skills, maybe try reading a few books and you'll get the hang of it