-Writing Quality-
I do not believe you are a native English speaker, you're doing well so far with the writing portion; However, in concern to the quality, I do believe it could use some improvement. Author, you're making grammatical errors even some 2nd graders ( Begging of Elementary School) do not make, even so, these are small mistakes that lead to larger issues. Better to clip them at the source and fix them early on, they're just relatively small mistakes, only there are a bunch of them.
-Stability of Updates-
It is far too soon to right on this, but from what I surmise, the updates are regularly implemented into the list. This is decent, it is good to have frequent updates. In comparison, do not "blow your steam", take your time writing the novel. When taking a break for whatever reasons, inform your audience.
-Story Development-
Personally I like slow and methodical writing, this is one of them. Detail is a huge boost to any story, and you my author friend, have a size-able amount. It flows well into the next chapter like water to a gorge.
-Character Design-
Just as I stated previously, it is good to have detail. Your characters do not lack this detail, from the get-go you describe them in a appropriate manner. Although we have not seen many characters, I get a feeling I'll be seeing many more interesting supportive casts.
-World Background-
Author friend, you have put a decent amount of world building and cleared the fog away from a map I envisioned of what appears to be your world. Like the other two, story development and character design, you have done well to describe and appropriate features to your world most do not. Stay on this path and improve.
Sincerely, Entitled.
