not good, contradicts alot of things through out story, no depth in romance or kingdom building or well story plot in general, need proof reading i mean like "she was mad and couldnt continue eating so she stopped talking and continued eating" and this type of writing continues to happen alot throughout the story
i somewhat liked it till 70th chapter, as mcs power was kinda cucked and weakened by plot and explanations. mcs previous pets being 'frozen' and leaving him without anything was meh as well.
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I hardly see a synopsis begins with this many questions. It is intriguing and refreshing. The story is also interesting. Please keep going and write more! Good job, author! I enjoy reading it. ?
Info, info, more info, more detailed info. Thoughts, more thoughts, more detailed thoughts. Random persons information, more random persons information, more detailed random persons information. Another novel that doesn't know how to differentiate between thoughts and speech, and this one is even worse, mixed in with thoughts - telepathic speech. Also hard to tell who is saying what, a lot of the time.And seriously the amount of exposition is insane. If you are a person that cares about every side character and every goddamn country and wants to know the 9 generations of that passerby's family tree and what socks he is wearing before he goes to sleep, well this is just the novel for you.~Seriously so much pointless explanations that are so goddamn long.The power levels are confusing, His power level is confusing. The stats values are confusing. The whole ranking system is confusing. How Reyne level up (everything from class to sword, to etc) is a complete mess. If you like stories that are padded with extra extra of pointless information, where you have 0 idea who is speaking or if they are speaking or thinking or having a conversation via telepathy or if its the narration, where power levels make no sense, where the best story is in the past, Well then this is just the story for you.
The whole premise of this novel is unique and worth exploring. However, the author failed badly at writing emotion. It's to the point of making me wonder if he's a sociopath.The MC went to look for his friend/roommate he's been playing games all night with.He found his dead body mutilated by stomach acid along with a couple others. You'd think he'd atleast be affected by the scene. But nope, the author glossed over it as if it's nothing. Then he went home and acted as if nothing happened in front of his dead friend's fiancé, just because it's inconvenient. Then when she cried after hearing the news, he "comforted" her by saying "It's live. He wouldn't have died if he hadn't gone". What kind of comforting is that? Had the author never once comforted anyone before?Then he met up with a group of friends, after seeing 2 people getting eaten by fishes in a park, and confirmed that apocalypse is coming, he asked the group if they wanted to go karaoke? Dude...And of course, he raped the widow girl 2 weeks after her fiancé died. But apparently, it's okay cuz she felt good. The next morning, he decapitated a thug, and then proceed to massacre the ones running away in 20s just because they're thugs. Bear in mind that the dudes who ran away didn't do anything. Again, zero feeling. After all that, you'd think that he's an experienced warrior from ancient time? Nope, he's just a normal fresh graduate office worker. It's as if to the author, what he did is perfectly normal. It would have been fine if the author intended for the MC to be an antihero character, but he doesn't. Every time the MC does something ridiculous, the author keeps slapping in some weak excuses to portray him as a good guy. Just because he's a normal guy doesn't make it okay to rape. Just because they're thugs doesn't mean you can massacre them when they haven't done anything. If the MC wants to rape or massacre, face it like a man. Don't come up with some hypocritical excuses to portray him as a good guy.
John repressed the laughter he wanted to get out, and revised his new contracts, a succubus with thousands of years of experience and a general who looks powerful, but with Fiona's curse.
I won't bore you with that stuff, so I'll just say that time is getting tighter. And that means I'll have to compromise writing with everythign else that comes up in daily life.
