The Player's System - Reviews

Reading the first 5 chapters, I want to point out something.

Jake Lin, a defected human who can't use his right hand but is a genius at mathematic. It seem like everything was normal as he got home to see his older sister, playing that popular game and possibly became a professional gamer.

Then it all went spiral and out of control when she decided to use some code which caused a huge disaster and Jake Lin became unconscious, only to wake up with a "system".

So far, this storyline is intriguing and kept me interested but one flaw thing about this novel is the formatting.

It got a little bit difficult to understand when the conversation is jumbled up in one paragraph. I suggest the author to separate the paragraph into 1-2 sentences for us reader to read it clearly and not get confused.

I wished to say more but so far with only 5 chapters out, I can only wait for more to see the development and how Jake Lin will utilize his system to benefit him such as, getting rid of the handicapped status.

this seems interesting and the interesting point for me is that mc can complete tasks and gain XP to  new abilities and I will continue reading it when more chapters come out,  good luck author

Author's note: There are few things that should be cleared before you pick up the story and give it a go.
1. The intention of writing this gaming novel is not to educate noobs. There are so many gaming novels talking about every skills dragging hundred of chapters in increasing the levels of the skills and blah blah. So to say you won't find cliche things. If you cannot digest something new then do not try this story.
2. My writing style differ. I am an original author and I have my creative space so my writing has its difference which might be new or unacceptable for many of you. So if you decide to read it then it means you can tolerate different writing style. If you still complain then your complains would be considered groundless.
3. I am not native English speaker and English is my fourth run on language. You can expect grammer 'degenration' at many points in the novel. If you feel sour reading poor grammer based story then my suggestion is to save your taste buds.
4. I have no plans of including romance or harem in this story.
5. This story is created in alternate universe so keep your common sense limited to yourself.
6. I will be hiring artist to draw main characters so that you can have general idea about our MC's team.
7. If necessary I will create character lists and the list of professions other than the weapons. Anyone interested to take look at those lists can join my discord server.
8. Enjoy the story development with the author. Have questions other than the above mentioned then leave a comment here.

For anyone wondering, I think the novel has the potential to be fantastic. However, the author desparately needs to hire an editor. You can understand what is happening and what the author is describing, but the verbiage and sentence structure is really, really bad.

I only really have one comment, and it’s vital that the person publishing this book on here reads it: Please, for the love of god, find someone to handle the grammar for you. Find a proper translator to handle this so it doesn’t look so blocky or cut off in areas.

I read the last book you had on here, but after a while, the grammar started causing massive headaches. Your story has plenty of potential, you’re a great Storyteller. However, you NEED to find someone who can make it look more readable. You will scare away hundreds of potential readers who can’t handle this lack of care towards the language and the story. Otherwise, you’re doing great. Just make sure you work hard to find someone who has English as their first language to properly go through and fix the grammar. Using translation tools DOES NOT WORK.

Reading the first few chapters I was intrigued with the story, it had potential. However the grammar and writing are confusing, this is harsh but I can barely understand the story.

I've checked the novel out. it's so bad mate. can someone please delete this already? the author must be braindead or something. i thought it was so good when I saw the other reviews and the win-win ranking but it's a joke

I believe there is a problem in the translations for this novel. The grammer and sentence structure can be confusing.
I could not make it past a few chapter before giving up. I tried looking ahead and it didn't seem to get better.

the story is amazing but the writing quality is bad ( no offence ) you can understand the meaning of the things the author is trying to portray but it gets kind of annoying reading grammar mistakes here and there. But if the author becomes better at english, this story would be a masterpiece.


That's my take

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It seems likea good story, but badly translated. Despite many missing connecting words, and improper word form choices, I was interested enough to keep reading until I ran out of chapters. I suspect that practice will improve the writing quickly, because the story telling is decent in spite of the slightly broken English.

Some suspension of disbelief is required for me, since the setting feels rather game-within-a-game, but as long as I set aside the expectation that the main character lives in the same reality that I do, it seems fairly consistent so far.

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I wanna read mooooooreeee... bxbsjzjxbxhsjsjzjxnbxnxjcjdjjdjxbcbc don't know why it needs a 140 letters but ok... I'm enjoying it waaaahhhhh