Chapter 4 currently:The concept behind this story is good but the execution is subpar at best. The main flaw that the author has is that they rush through things too quickly. Now let’s get to the main points:Writing Quality: Barely readable. As stated earlier, the author rush through things and doesn’t give characters any type of emotions behind their actions. This make it difficult to understand characters and the action they take.Story Development: There’s barely anything i can say here since it’s just the start.Character Design: This is a bad one. Currently, characters have no personality whatsoever. Actions done by them make no sense. Take the “neglected treatment” for example, I doubt that the main cast would allow things to get that far, especially naruto who has been a victim of such thing. World Background: Literally everything revolves around “Root bad, Danzo bad, Mc and his family are treated badly, woe be me” and it’s annoying. Not to mention how flawed the backstory of the ocs are, Root agents are literally brainwashed till they’re blank state. Danzo is not a character that can trust anyone with that type of information or power. And even if somehow the ocs backstory are somehow true, Danzo literally have failsafes on his root soldiers. I doubt he’ll let the father live since he knows so much.
