The story is starting off really good. reminds me of some others stories I read on here. You are over doing it on the Descriptions of everything the characters are doing. very repetitive. There is A part of the story that made no sense whats so ever. you had the kids who are very smart drink
I was told by this young lady that her boss want to invest a huge project in her, weird hen? So, I came to see maybe i can do something big, bigger then where I am!
