The idea is promising but a few touches need to be made.
1. More paragraphs: Few paragraphs make the work a little overbearing to read so please give paragraphs at most after three to four sentences.
2. Spacing: At the end of certain sentences, there are no spaces giving no difference between the end of a sentence and the beginning of another.
Overall, the plot is nice but it needs some editing.
Keep up the good work by the way. Writing isn't easy
