The First Magical World War - Reviews

The storyline is good but quality of the grammar & expression is terrible. With proper editing this could be a great book.

I really like this novel! I got hooked since the beginning, and I was so disappointed when the chapters began to become locked, lol. But, I would gladly unlock the chapters because this is such an amazing novel!

Amazing writing style. This right here is pro level writing, I’m speachless. There are little to no mistakes, it’s smooth and addictive, there was nothing what would disturb me while I was trying to focus on the story. It’s easy to imagine the action and enviroment

My impression on this one is, it was really good and many good and detail description around the game. It also has a good gaming mechanism which almost follow the norm in real life. It very in opinion. Thanks author

First of all, that was a refreshing introduction. A lot of readers know about VR game and it would be good to read another work of a potential star ?The narration and description are clean and brief. Easy to understand. Easy to read.More updates!!!

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An interesting story that could be a lot better with bit more work on the translation. Gender indicators are a mess and there is a lot of flavor content missing after translation.

Errors all over the place and even a Name change at Chapter 20                                                                                          

(Writing this about five chapters in)The prologue starts off mysterious and overall intriguing, making me want to continue onto the next chapter right away. In terms of the writing quality, it is highly-detailed and immersive; lending an smooth visualization of the world the characters are in. The characters themselves are interesting, human in the fact that they are flawed.

why did you change the story I liked the slime one???......................................................................... ...........

- "Now I'll go for the other prey"- said Kylo Ren with a cold and detached voice- "Han Solo awaits."

The Emperor couldn't help but realize he didn't notice when his daughter had changed so much.