Excellent start, i like the characters very much. However the novel is in such a long hiatus i dont even know if the author have abandoned this or not. It is not worth your time for now
This novel description seems very much interesting ?? and it even a new kind of a novel...................................................................
Your story Backgound is interesting but it was not really writen much after the intro and i fand this the best part of your story.Writing quality is bad, you can read the story but to many gramar fault but the greteatst BS is your characters in the story. To many bad cliches. lack of consistency and logic, when i have read the story i was thinking are all persons in the game idiots or 5 year old children?
This is a book from the same author as LoHP so I shouldn’t be surprised that this book is also awesome. Vote for the books so that it comes out sooner.
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It's alright.The main issue for me is the change in writing style. In later chapters it's written in such a melodramatic way. For example a character will be fighting to save a city and it will say, "She must retain her boundless resolve to sacrifice herself for justice. The fate of the world depended on her and she must not falter." Then it will keep going like that for 2 or 3 paragraphs before doing any fighting. It also began to focus mostly on everyone except the main character. It's not unreasonable given the setup of the MC staying behind the scenes in his dungeon, but I liked how Top Tier Providence balanced that better.Except... the other characters are actually more interesting than the MC and his subordinates. Because the MC and his crew become cardboard cutouts who pretty much only say cringe and cliche villain lines.
