terjerat obsesi sang mafia - Reviews

Thanks author for such a delectable story. Just a slight adjustment in your schedule and you'd entertain us readers for a long time. Big ups to the author and other readers. I await more chapters. Oh my gosh I'm in love with the story. Story is so interesting. Writing quality - mechanical accuracy, spelling of words, punctuation, translation, and vocabulary must be improved. High stability of story update, keep it up! World background or setting should even be real and not limited to only anime worlds.

Mc is a simp                                                                                                                                                

It's a pretty good story and a proper though out the MC has a good system but doesn't make him OP in an instant only gives him a multitude of options to choose from, The MC doesn't get everything served in a platter but has to work for it, The plot is properly thought out and we'll developed with even proper world development and character design, the only problem being the update as I personally requested the author to write it on discord but he still didn't I wish he did but I guess he lost interest in the story, I will be honest it was the only good apocalypse novel I read after reading multiple of trash or Chinese xenophobic or stereotypical novels and I read it till the latest chapters, the story was well throughout and explored which made me interested in the story but sadly the author lost interest, I personally wouldn't mind being spoiled if the author in future plans to drop it, I will be more than grateful if you tell me the future development and plot and everything you were planning 'incase' you are going to drop it, That's all I wanted to say thank you

Wait.... before I start this story. First I need to immagine how the fck does a tiger howls? Never mind the fish the leaps to the dragons gate i don't know where that gate is.

Why do we keep getting **** with this sort of ultra nationalist crap in it?  People love to piss on Hollywood/Americans for pulling this **** (which they do and it isn't ok) but there are waaaay too many novels on here that take this to a WHOLE new level.  This and the other novel by this author are prime examples...

Fouth wall breaks are everywhere and annoying, definitions on whats happening is excessive but only non useful info that we dont need. Keeps putting stuff like *slaps his forehead* which is really annoying and unnecessary you dont need to put the star signs and you dont need to keep making the characters actions over excessive and skips important info like what happen when kin fell in chap 5, you also skipped alot about the characters and their personalities.   Also you could just write it like this. Ken was talking to the white ball, when suddenly his parents walked into his room. But soon Ken realized that his parents couldnt see the white ball of light and immediately calmed down. He then asked the ball of light “They can’t see you?” the ball of light then replied “ Yes, your are the only one who can see me.” Ken was surprised by this and soon became curious as to how.OrKen then spotted a light in the distance and realized it was the same kind of light he saw when he first met Will, Ken then realized that it was another important character and became excited. When Ken made it to the character and realized it was a girl and injured he became worried, so he and his father who was also running beside him helped the girl back to his house via teleportation along side Will.

The adventure pretty fun. There no voting xe

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I will be honest with you. The story is good, the plot, and the characters. And it did also reminds me SAO on this story and that was cool. However, you should try giving a little space format on Shinji's explanation. Anyways, keep up the good work.

Recommended. Try reading a few chapters and you will get stuck at this one. Perfectly written until now and have great expectations. I hope the Author keeps writing.

Man I must admit you've wrote a very good novel

Hello author. I tried reading the first 10 chapters but eventually gave up. just my personal opinion but I recommend that you rewrite the starting chapters. The reason why is because the same thing was said multiple times but in different ways. Why would I want to read about the same thing twice?I get that because of the constant time skips, you have to reassure the reader that "the mc has yet to change" but it felt strenuous to read and I wasn't told anything new. Also the world building. You introduced us to the crumbled and war-torn city early on but it wasn't until after a few chapters that I was told that there was an actual group of people living together. Maybe I missed it but there was no explanation for how the (camp?) looked like.These were just my thoughts and a writer can never cater to everyone so I understand if it was just me that prefers a different style of storytelling.