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Tangled with the fated mates
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It’s classic wish fulfilment fantasy but that’s the fun of it. Although it’ not particularly imaginative it’s very entertaining so far
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author, please tell me you do not intend to make a harem of 7 or 10 I can barely deal with 2 so that would just ruin me also is he a pervert that only wants women or thinks about them all the time or just treat them differently also I just want an answer to read this I am sure it would be great
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Deleting reviews is such a scumbag move. Scum. Pervert. Degenerate. Trash. Garbage. Useless. Disgusting. These actions are worse than watching a bad NTR.
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Into the Zombie World is a book of fiction written by Neil_Ads. The story revolves around  a man named Nile who sought to survive a zombie apocalypse after his untimely death by being bumped by a truck. The author uses present-tense. Well, it is a good story. Personally, what I love about the book is Nile's intelligence and the way he reacts to certain things. He thinks logically, making the right choice except for the store as he could've looted the first three houses instead of choosing the store.I love his plans and schemes to get rid off or defeat zombies. I think there is a mixture of futuristic technology since there is this so called system that displays certain things. I'm not used to reading these kind of novel mixtures.Anyway, the grammar and punctuation is definitely one thing the author must improve. Yes, it uses present-tense but because of this, it seems more like a guy telling actions rather than a describing and story-telling. He is walking, He is going, he is banging, things like that should be changed.Because of this, it lacks emotions and some elements of a horror novel. You could describe the zombies more rather than using Big, small, fat, or sharp teeth. I didn't feel any suspense except for the parts in which the dialogues weren't aplenty. I would like to suggest that you describe things like this:Example:His leg were trembling. Try going to the next level:His legs were noodles. Or to add more suspense and frightening elements, I would suggest:Example: The silence shrouded his mind. (Lacks emotions)"Once the quietness arrived, it stayed and spread in Estha. It reached out of his head and enfolded him in its swampy arms…sent its stealthy, suckered tentacles inching along the insides of his skull, hoovering the knolls and dells of his memory, dislodging old sentences, whisking them off the tip of his tongue."Something like that. Well, I hope this honest criticism helped out!
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Your style is really inspiring. The way story is started seems interesting and unique from others. It's sad to hear about his parent's death as this factor will affect his life. Really interesting concept.
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stupid..................................
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The cover of this book is too dull, a little request that you add something to spice it up. I lost interest in reading the book because of its cover but when I read the first chapter, it was so interesting that I had to take a cup of tea. You deserve a clap ??????. Brave author
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Everything just kept me looking forward to what is next. Starting from the title itself. All I can say is the storyline Is great and believe this is going to be a great one in time to come. Keeping going author ??? I'm waiting for more updates from you
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I've read the first chapter and I am getting some serious solo leveling vibes, I mean he is about to die and then like KABLAMO wanna be a fucking player.
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As he said that, Ori noticed the shock on the faces everyone present, especially his attacker. Even though Ori had no idea who this young arrogant man was everyone else clearly did.
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"I believe everyone is here. So I would like everyone to settle down." The noise of the students simmered down. The man cleared his throat then he looked at students with such intimidating and serious eyes.
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I woke up to the sound of my alarm going off. I looked around my new room and thought "Well...new school here i come". I got out of bed and opened the curtains to let in some sunlight, even though it was 6:00 in the morning. I went to my bathroom and took a shower. After the 30 minute shower i put on some pj's. Then I brushed my teeth,washed my face, and combed my hair. After i did all of that I stared at myself in the mirror. I have long black hair that stop about my butt. My eyelashes are long and my eyes are flirty. I have tanned skin and perfect teeth. My lips are plump and shaped perfectly. My body is slim and thighs are thick, but not too thick. My butt is shaped just right. People say I am beautiful. And in some ways I believe them. I do not think too highly of myself.  After observing myself I change into my clothes. I put on light blue high waisted ripped jeans and a red crop top along with my red and white jordans to match. I walk downstairs and see my mother and father eating breakfast at the table in the kitchen."Goodmorning mom and dad" I say. "Goodmorning hun" my mom says. "Goodmorning Snowflake" says my dad. I go and grab my breakfast of bacon, pancakes, grits, eggs, and toast. I was beginning to start eating when I heard "LITTLE SISTER!!!". I jump out of my seat and into my brothers arms. "What are you two doing here?" I asked.

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