starting as a baron's son in magic world - Reviews

The character's flat, the plot's as straight as highway through the prairie, the romance is bland, and the world building is a bad impressionist landscape with blobs of colours smeared to leave a distinctly vague  idea of the subject of the painting.

Okay, I'm hooked with the synopsis. I can get that you've already have a great world background. It's a potential great shounen storyline, with lots of adventures. My only suggestions is about the description part, I find it difficult to understand, that some parts may be a bit confusing. I'll suggest the author to have some re-read or proofreading to make improvements.P.S. I would keep on reading, if I find something, I'll comment so you'll make improvements.Keep it up!!!

I enjoyed reading this, I think that the concept for the novel was good. The r18 scenes I think were well made. Good job author.Filling in space for reviews is so annoying, don't mind this.

Hello I hope you all like this novel, this novel is not a normal sent to another world type I hope to make the world and characters come alive and yo be cared for so if I need to fix anything please leave a review thank you all

H.O.: "Very well. Take this rock of origin and stand in the center of the magic circle."

"Terrible."

It was a woman he saw, standing just below him by a few inches. Her body was bathed in a swath of white that reflected well the rays of the sun. Her clothing consisted of solely a transitional highcollared

"Yes, yes, pumpkin, you are grown up! I'm sorry. Please don't cry." Veol's father sighed as he scratched his head. How did it turn to this?

Especially that time when the water company cut off the neighborhood's supply because of a long period of drought. Everyone reeked and yet at the end of the day they were able to have fun because it finally rained in what seemed like years. Everyone bathed in it. She could remember vividly the fact that little children ran around butt-naked in the rain. Screaming, laughing and rolling in the mud like pigs.

"Romania I guess"

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The class leader quickly stand up. "Stand ... up ...."