if you straight up turn of your brain while you read this then yeah its kinda good. other than that thought the mc doesn't even try and help his girlfriend just tried to create perfect accidents which make no sense btw
Structural Improvements,it takes baby steps to reach big steps. Work on capitalizing your sentences, ie, dialogue."He stood, staring into the empty room known as the abyss room. He wondered if he could ever see the light of day after being trapped here for a century."That's a example I came up with in less than a minute, theres some mistakes but its generally what you want to aim for in your next chapters. Description and details need to also be improved upon.
For this story it's good enough, I quite like stories about Idol or Trainee so this is a suitable story for me to read .. I hope the author doesn't drop this story
I’m not sure how this is so highly rated (4.4) at the time of writing this review.Readers’ standards just keep going down and down I guess.This novel is written by an author with the maximum level of ignorance possible. It makes for a laughable reading experience.The irony of it all is quite great.Good luck to those who take the plunge despite my advice not to.
This story is wonderful! If you love TRPGs you should get a kick out of this. Just try to leave your preconceptions of a fantasy world behind. Some common stereotypes fit, while many are lacking. The author does a wonderful job of world building, and an even better job of balancing humor and cold violence. the only part of this i even thought about not giving full marks too is writing quality, and only because there were a few minor typos through out. After thinking more I decided that there is only so much perfection you can expect from a novel published on a daily basis with no editor. All in all a perfect web novel and one I am willing to spend all my coin on. Death to the enemies of Invictus!
Great prose and of course a popular isekai theme was chosen for this novel. So, gaining readers in WN shouldn't be a problem at all. The story developed well within the first 13 chapters and we can see how the ML evolved throughout the progress. Waiting to see more action. Good job, bro!
When I started reading this story, it was on a whim, I honestly didn't think it would be interesting, but because I didn't have anything else to read so I decided to give it a shot, so I did, and honestly I've enjoyed reading this story, and I can't wait for more. Keep up the good work
Focusing on the link they both shared, Adrien slowly started to feel the same things as him. He felt yearning and hunger, abruptly opening his eyes he looked at the little glutton and picked him up.
