Hello, there, author. As promised, I'll give you brutally honest review.
As I've said in the other day, you need to fix how you write the dialogue but I see no improvement.
I mean, why you do you use "<" and ">" to separate the dialogues and paragraphs instead of ("Blas bla, bla.).
Your story is good, but ruined by your ignorance to learn the proper writing techniques.
good luck.
