National Treasure - China - Reviews

Unique story.

Good ol' Mary Sue syndrome compounded by plot armor. There are many grammatical errors and inconsistencies, like how he has 100 bullets for his revolver in one chapter then 200 a few chapters later. There are better apocalypse novels out there.

In summary “He lived his youth in vain as a rich second generation and squandered his family’s wealth”First chapter, paragraph 4“My family’s financial situation is not good, so I chose to work part-time to earn my living expenses after I entered university”Story is completely different from synopsis, and it doesn’t stop here.

Excellent work! I hope this book would bear fruit to you, author! And I hope your readers would love it! Writing quality for me it's around 4/5 (but I am generous right now so 5) There are multiple things I'd like to point out such as passive voice misuse,  filter words, showing techniques, and some words that you need to delete. This include: *boring life (you need show the scene that would say that the MC has a boring life instead of telling it*no friends- the same goes to this one*was full of- passive voice misuse*he saw- filter words*he began to read- delaying the sentence*was sleeping-passive voice misuse

A very nice thing to do for those who wish to become authors. Don't know if this will be read but would you be willing to write on how to start a story? I have the story line all planned out but don't know how to write a starting point. Additional Suggestions for topics:- How to write a filler- How to write a synopsis

was pretty good, but then changed to locked chapters, we dont get many free passes, even with membership, its cheaper to just look on other sites

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"Nor will they want to, the greedy sons of..."

We created a story where the other princess, who desperately wanted to not be left behind, tried numerous times to get rid of the man who was ruining their friendship, only to fail with each attempt. You added that the stronger princess began to feel lonely every time she went on an adventure on her own, and so she found another way for them to have fun with each other. With the help of the man, the stronger princess created a new game that only she and the other princess could play. Once again they became in sync with each other, with a friendship so legendary that all future princesses looked up to them for it.

My mother and Conrad took me away, I released myself from their grasp, they tried to get a hold of me but I was able to release myself, but unlike what they thought, I ran with them on the same pace. My face still looked as if I was oblivious to what was actually happening.

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