Very interesting. I am intrigued in the sibling relationship and the MC's goals. I want to see what kind of plot the author has laid out.Writing Quality: I can see the quality of the writing and that you try very hard to edit. There is still small grammar errors, but overall content was prestine. I do have a pet peave for authors who tell action words, instead of showing the action. (Example: Sigh, *cough cough)Story Development: The pace of the story is perfect for this kind of genre.Character Design: I can see Zuifan's personality vividly. Just wondering if Chunu will have a big role because she seems invisible to me. Perhaps give her more descriptions. World Background: Good world building. So far the book is slowly explaining itself.
