Marsy: Miracles on Mysterious Mars - Reviews

Okay here comes the great review of self proclaimed Master Blaster Plaster Trasher... Ugh... I guess I got a little self burn... Ahem Anyway here comes review after I read first five chapters.

Pros Of Novel:

1- The detailing of characters are great. Emma Fisher already became my Waifu and Alex and Ravi are best male characters. Lucy is still vaguely discribe but not every character can be discribed in just 5 chaps.

2- The plot is intriguing. All these things like it's futurestic yet there ain't much need to describe atmosphere is what makes reading iy convenient.

3- Till now, none of the chapter is anything boring. They piqued interest and were able to maintain that.(No even I can do that... I can't do anything though)

Now onto the Cons:

Well there ain't much maybe cuz it's beginning or maybe it's just that good but here are some suggestions.... Try to maintain world building. The surrounding the crowd and even tiny things like rooms and halls. Even though it looks like there ain't any need to do that now and story is interesting.  If you suddenly started world building all at once, it will become hard as well as boring. So If yoh start doing it now irrespective of whether it's needed or not with interesting stories still there, I think it would help you in long run.

So Finally My 5 Start review cuz there ain't any flaws for now at leat.

Not bad but far from perfect. I like "!!!" and "???" their chemistry is good. You have some grammar mistakes. There is a lack of description of the looks of the characters and setting. Paints a pretty foggy picture in the reader's mind.

Keep writing and improving!

As an author, I think I'm doing a good job. So without any shame (who knows me here anyway

Okay, here’s my honest review. I’ll start with the title. “Miracles on Mysterious Mars”, sounds kinda interesting. It means that the setting will be in outer space. Next, the synopsis, I like that it’s short, concise, and direct to the point. It also mentioned that it’s in the year 2080, so I expect some futuristic gadgets and other sciency stuff.  Lastly, the prologue, or was that chapter 1? I was confused. Also, though the grammar is passable, there were a lot of punctuation misplacements. Also, a piece of advice, instead of using (!!!) and (???) for unnamed characters, it’s better to use (Person A) and (Person B).

Anyway, keep it up and keep improving, author!!

I believe some more work can be done on character description. There are indeed some Grammer errors. Development of the plot and chapter to can get better. I have faith you have the potential to upgrade on this point

The story has much potential and I can see it going places. However, I know this story can be of better quality. The story telling could be better and more description would fit this story nicely. I hope you keep up the good work author!