Hello, fellow author. I'm going to give you some constructive criticism. 1: Please show what's happening in the story more. •In your story, you tell the reader that the character feels a certain way. Ex: "He felt confident." Here's an example of showing your protagonist's confidence."He raised his chin high, looked his opponent in the eye, and smirked." You can increase your word count if you explain each emotion. And your readers can immerse themselves better. 2: Please don't repeat the same information twice In the same chapter. •This disrupts the reader's immersion in the story. •I know it helps add word count, but that frustrates readers. 3: Your grammar needs some work. It's hard to immerse yourself in a book if there are many grammatical errors.
