Awesome story and i'm really looking forward to how it developes. Just a few things that i think would make it a better experience if fixed. 1- there are too many question marks in places they shouldnt be. A character would be making a statement and then there would be a question mark at the end, which isnt a big issue but can be irritating at times. 2- there are too many fully capatilised words or sentences. I know that its for emphasising a point but its a little much. Also all the "everyone shouted "WHHAATTT" " gets old. It just doesnt make sense and makes me feel like im watching a cartoon. 2- generally the spelling isnt that bad but there are a few words that are mispelled regularly for example the word "read" is always spelled as "red". Its ok if its once or twice but this has been the same since the start of the novel untill the current chapter im up to (100s). For spelling and grammar there are many free programs like grammarly that can help you. Anyway sorry if it seemed like a rant but im just trying to help you out and make the novel a better experience. Great job on the story and best of luck