The first chapter was pretty much flawless, so good job on that in terms of Grammer and punctuation. It establishes the mc's personality greatly, showing his goal, ambition, drive, and rhyme, reason, everything. It showed multiple forms of conflict and comedy, and also showed a ton of world building as well as mystery. It flowed smoothly and read like a full on professional novel. Good job author, this is one of the greatest first chaps I have seen.