This novel has a good concept and plot (I think it might have). The only problems are the constant errors. Not grammatic errors but text error where some paragraphs don't make sense due to the wording.
Author, I have tip that you can use while editing your chapters.
First write your chapter and then wait at least 30 min before editing your chapter. Before you wait the chapter ia still fresh in your head so everything makes sense for you. But after you wait you see the things you could have done better.
This is why editors are so great. But I assume you can't get an editor so just follow the tip above and you'll be most likely off better.
Ps. I got this tip from a experienced author, but I was too lazy to implement this into my novel, although I probably will do it.
