Krystallos Chaos - Reviews

I enjoy when a story isn't rushed and when it's well written, and these certainly apply to this story. It is eloquently worded and it spends much time on describing the interactions between characters as well as the thoughts of the main character. These are both the book's greatest strenths and weaknesses in my opinion. To illustrate this I will write two lines essentially describing the same thing:-"He could not help but allow the lurking smile at the back of his mind grow on his face as he expressed the feeling his thoughts gave him"-"He smiled at the thought"I enjoy these lengthy descriptions... but not when the book is full of them. Most of the descriptions are like the first option, and I got tired of it pretty quickly. The phrase "could not help but" is also unnecessarily abused to an almost hilarious degree. While I certainly cannot fault the author on their english, I wish they would consider the time to use these  dragged out ways to say things that could be short and concise. Which brings me to my second point, the pacing. Dear lord is the pacing slow, which I also enjoy at times, but only if we get some action in between. Those who have read the book may be thinking "wasn't the monster wave enough action?" and to that I say, it should have been half as lengthy and have more fighting rather than pointless dialogue. Also, the monsters are literally only described as that, 'monsters'. Nothing is said about how the regular monsters look in the first couple of chapters of the fight. I'd say, give the book a chance, those of the same opinion as me regarding pacing and language will quickly realize it isn't for them, and for the less picky, I believe you will enjoy it. It certainly isn't bad by any means, but I will not be reading more than 60 chapters of it. Hope you can take some of the criticism to heart and improve author, flaws aside I think you have a good story in you.

The book is very nice. .. .a lot of different fantasy is mixed together I like it very much I would love to continue reading. it's just that the chapters are too less please upload more chapters I have already caught up with the chapters

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"I wonder why," Annabeth replies dryly - shaking her head.

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"Hey, Urgle I am here So what did you want to show me."

King Yun said nothing and preferred to take everything she had to say with a permanent cold sweat on her forehead.

You'll never know if you don't go

Great War may`ve ended, but the Cold War was still going on, even if the entirety of House of Gremory was now in Alexander`s hands, awaiting the execution at his command, including the Crimson Satan himself, the man that had put Alexander`s father in coma, from which he still hasn`t awoken yet, whist Baraqiel and Lucina made full recovery from their injuries. There was going to be blood spilled, as Fallen Angels and Angels demanded that House of Gremory, the people that had tried to manipulate Heir of Lucifer, threatened him and attacked Azazel, were put down for good, and Alexander was going to do it with pleasure. The blood was already spilled, as Sirzechs`, Venelana`s and Zeoticus` Peerages were quickly hunted down by combined efforts of Exorcists, Angels, SOP and Hero Faction and killed without mercy. Out of all Servants that House of Gremory had left, only Kiba remained, as he wished to die as a loyal dog of Rias, and Alex would gladly grant his request.

"Oh okay, thats pretty clear."

The author has been making great stories since the past three to four years and I see that the system holders are slowly getting collected so this is nice ?

This is some really good stuff, I like the dark tangle for the main character and all, keep up with the good work author ??? don't keep us waiting for too long