Quite frankly, this one has a lot of wasted potential
There's a lot to improve author
The grammer is just something enough to be rated as readable, not something I'd prefer, but still read it
Story development is quite slow, though that's my personal opinion, I just don't like these kinda excruciatingly slow novels
Character design needs a lot of improvement, I recommend research on psychology author, your character is VERY inconsistent with what you tell him or try to portray him as, to me it seems as though you have no idea how truly prideful individuals behave and I'm not talking about ones that hide their insecurities with a layer of pride and arrogance I'm talking about truly prideful ones, they don't go around gawking at anything remotely "impressive" like your character does because to them, they themselves are more impressive than majority of stuff around them, they don't really show a lot of emotions either, you really just forget about your characters pride majority of time, that's not how that works man.
World background is ok I guess, since we haven't really explored a lot in this area.
My review can change in future.
Tho ngl, this is pretty good if you're writing for the first time author.
I hope you improve in the future.
