I shall be honest this was difficult to actually read due to the grammar errors but as that was already covered I shall move on. Whilst I am no writer myself I shall give you some of my thoughts. Try to be more consistent with numbers you start with mid 2500-2627 then you state the exact range 2580-2627 (which is late 2500's not middle). Also use the units of measure for example years. " and it was technology from 2600." could be and it was technology from the year 2600. or it was technology from the 27th century. It helps clarify when you have multiple unit types. examples are stats, damage or time.To help with grammar you could try "Grammarly" I have not used it myself but its supposed to be free so at worst you decide it doesn't suit you. Let me know if this helped ill check it again in a few days and see how the story is going.