Overall 3.3The title, synopsis, system and cover are pretty much all lies. I don’t see clicking to level up or get points. The system is the default except it can level up with points. MC doesn’t use the system much to jam in background and characters. It is not easygoing, etc to read. It’s dry expository, like reading a diary of someone’s life.Writing 3.5Rounded up to 4. Seriously though, why with the sentence fragments, especially when describing the uncle?Updating 5It says 18/week. Quality beats quantity. Slow down and read over your writing. If you feel nothing, or it doesn’t have any moments that stick out, you need to fix that.Story 1When there is a system, especially when hyped up this much, readers expect it to lead the MC’s decisions. Since the premise is flawed and the system is both shafted and underwhelming, you get nothing.Characters 3.5Rounded up to 4. MC is shown to be mature but puts his golden finger second to his ongoing day, as if anyone getting a second chance wouldn’t try exploiting or even exploring their system in the spare moments they have. Too many people looking down on MC for my taste. There aren’t enough normal people to interact with, and MC is lowkey despite his previous ambitions of grandeur.Background 3.5Rounded up to 4. Moments get slowed down because passages must be dedicated to descriptions. The pacing can be improved if descriptions are more dynamic and concurrent instead of the static and stale showcasing there is now.
