Gate Of Destiny : NewWorld - Reviews

If someone could share the original title in chinese, it would be great. Moremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

I am the shameless author reviewing his own work.An original web novel that I wrote to improve my skills.I'm an ******* writer. A generic and unique original novel about Hoshi and his second chance at life with a system. He has a dream of becoming a world-famous chef.The chef system will help him reach that goal.Expect foodgasm, generic tropes, long food descriptions and memes.Maybe a harem? lolThis novel contains Magic, Comedy, Cooking, Business, System, Second Chance and Game Elements.

so I'm only on chapter 50 while I write this, I will update later when I read more. so I notice a lot of grammar errors. by that I mean use of the wrong word for example the word taste is never used it's always test and she/he are wrong once and a while. it's not a big deal you know what the author is trying to say. the story is very slice of life at the moment. mostly revolving around the fmc and how she believes every male around her to be an idiot. the male mc doesn't get a whole lot of screen time but when he does he just feels like a push over and I haven't seen a lot of character development with him. it has being mentioned that other people see the emotional struggles he shows but nobody really does anything to help. they just kinda say "oh this other person will help" or at least that's how it feels to me finally I think my review sounded mostly negative but I do think this can be a great novel once the characters grow a little bit. I see a lot of potential in it and I fully believe the author can make that happen.

I remember reading a similar story to this in the past was much better with a indian mc named dustin desaan or something who becomes chosen of the speed force it was much better then this as its barely readable. lets also not forget this is locked chapter wise as a fan fiction which is illegal as you are referencing dc an leaves you open to a lawsuit you can do a speedester in any supernatural world without it using places from trademarked comics etc

Thanks for the update and for the record I have to go to the office and I will be there at baka bawal HAAHHAHA to get the plates and napkins and I will be there at baka

In a sense it could be said that I became friends with him, something that would have been strange and impossible for the previous me to do, especially for someone from such a weak race, the previous me would definitely have regarded him and the rest of humans as another prey.

from what you thought,

"Exactly, but remember the rules, we can't make humans who have the power of magic." Dark swinging his finger.

So why did I binge all 130 chapter you ask … Honestly because it’s a 11/10 BL. It actually has plot and takes the time to develop the main leads. I appreciate the weird reverse harem too as it makes everything so interesting Call me crazy but it’s rare to find a Bl where the women aren’t token evil love rival. So this really gives the author a lot of room to create conflict that isn’t stereotypical Keep up the good work author I’m now a big fan

very good  story  i liked it very much ?

I've just started reading your novel and I'm really enjoying it, so I hope you'll continue working on it.

I am keeping this in check but is this harem?