I don't think my review has any real meaning coming from an inexperienced writer such as me, but I'll give my views on the story anyways.
So from the first few chapters, there were many, many descriptions. Much so that it cut some fights and actions halfway, leaving me in awkward reads once in a while (though that's what I just observed).
There was also shifts in narration perspective, leaving me confused from time to time on whether the narrative of the story is in first-person or in third-person omniscient (I just figured out that every chapter that starts with "memories of..." is in first-person perspective, so yeah).
I also wasn't too invested between the characters, you know, having too many introduced in the first few chapters. It left me feeling like "I don't really care if Velsado dies or whatevs..." and more of like "When are the powers and magic stuff gonna come again?" Yes, I think I'm back to being a nine year old.
Although many things broke my immersion with the story, I really found the richness of the worldbuilding complete. The concepts of the story is unique, and I honestly don't know where the story will go (Although being predictable once in a while is a good thing). The many characters interacting with the world events, it really felt like a very much solid story where I don't think plotholes will arise (unlike in mine where I'm still fidgeting to fix loose ends).
If you reached this part of my review, then thank you for reading. Hope you'll kinda get something out of my review although I'm still new to writing myself. I just limited my review to the writing quality, story progression, characters, and worldbuilding if that's okay.
Cheers!