What looks to be a good story, unfortunately the translation makes it almost incomprehensible. Not for individual paragraphs, the actual English isn't too bad, rather it's like the story is missing the connecting narrative. There are aspects which don't get explained and story elements dropped in out of nowhere. The relationships are hard to understand and the motives are even more filled with gaps or what I'm assuming would be social cues or language which haven't been filled in.
I think the original story could have a lot of potential, but it is let down by the translation