Don't Pretend to be Good (Esports) - Reviews

I am Loving this! Just wish the mecha had pictures to go with them lol.Max has system skills that remind me of Kira and his FREEDOM!                                                                                 

Its alright, but not great.The translation is good, and there are no problems in the grammar.However, one of the characters in the book is Kobe Bryant, who is portrayed very differently to how i imagined him to be, and more like what a chinese author would think him to be.Slightly unrealistic in some of the world building aspects, and about 8 chapters and 2 months in, i srill dont know the names of the MCs family, or anything about the MCs family.6.2 out of 10

⚠️Spoilers⚠️:Two chapters in and there is already a massive plot hole. See, Merlin was one of the strongest figures in their world's history and his class was also the same as the MC's; an SSS-Class - Reader. But somehow, the very same teacher who used to brag about Merlin's achievements didn't recognize the MC's class even when Merlin's autobiography was available at the library. There is also the problem of the slightly less powerful, ice cold, and focused heroine. The side characters are two dimensional and didn't have proper development and they were used as items to drive the plot. In terms of the grammar, I didn't notice any big error but it was still a bit of a struggle to not focus on the minor errors.

I stumbled across this novel randomly and I was initially expecting a run of the mill ‘villain with a system’ perspective, but I am glad it subverted my expectations. The story is quite intelligent in that it introduces you to a ‘villain’ that is more of an anti-hero, in my opinion, who has advantages because of his rebirth and the system, but still has to use his wit and experience to figure things out as they come…he doesn’t just get everything handed to him on a platter.I also like that the plot is multi-layered and we find things out just as the protagonist does so in a sense we are living the experience along with him. I will say though that at the start, the plot was slow getting off the ground but it’s understandable since the author is learning the ropes as well.Overall, it’s a great book so far, and I can’t wait to find out more as things develop further!

I don't even want to waste time reviewing this novel. Alas I must do so for the betterment of my fellow readers. So here it goes. This novel is...toxic waste. Avoid at all costs.

Oh my god, the translation quality is goddamn bad. I dont event know who is the retard one, author or the translator.The MC is fucking idot with a wife. When he ia having a wife, the author give him 3 potential new heroin, the other characters are split into 2 : 1. Really good people with honest personality2. Fucking retarded **** who think he is a godThe more idot thing is, he got skill book, poison master for "PRIESTS" and fucking revive for "KNIGHT". And in the next chapter, humanoid monster thiev class have poison skill on themAnd the most basic thing the mc should do, to add friend the studio owners after he got into the game, but he didn't, its coz the author want to make the mc look so awesome and give exaggerated comment on the mc when he reveal who he was in the gameOverall, this novel is so basic, the translation is shiet, but who i am to judge. I only can leave a review.

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Let's start with your writing quality. Maybe my standards are too high, but your sentences are too long (some parts are honestly unnecessary) and some phrases are misplaced. I suggest you read about grammar rules on misplaced modifiers. You should also edit your usage of punctuations, so you can seperate your long sentences better. You're also somehow using some words wrongly.For example in first chapter:"Is that anyway to talk to me? I remind you that without me you would be nothing!"You can rewrite it as:"Is that how you're supposed to talk to me? Let me remind you, you would be nothing without me!"There are more errors, but I'll move on to the next.Story Development. The reason why he died is because he wanted to end the contract. So they blackmail him, then they kill him and the reason is too shallow-- he wanted to end the contract. Since this is under realistic fiction, he will only be blacklisted at most or more blackmail will be used. To make it better, why don't you add more enmity for the main lead. You also didn't mention how he adjusted and stuff.Character design. It's a bit confusing to read since the personality of other's aren't that distinct. But it's okay. World Background. It's somehow clear. Overall, it's good.

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I think you should deviate from the main story as anyone reading this will have already been through the LN, and the manwha. If not I'd suggest spending significantly less time on these type of parts.

I internally shouted as I then realise he wasn't the guy who was stalking me.

"Lalu apa? Jelas sekali bahwa tadi kau mengatakan gila."