Dominion System Rise of the under world king - Reviews

Ok so I don’t really write reviews but I just read up to the latest chapter  and I can say that this novel has a unique feel to it. It has a good pace which is not to slow or not to fast (good job author) and the thing I like the most about it is that Ozul has a unique character with the way he likes sleeping under a tree at night and switching to the house in the morning. It’s also awesome that he has a actual reason to like darkness and Gives some solid answers and comparisons not like the other novels which is like oh I love darkness and it’s one with me blah blah blah...One thing I would probably change about it is I feel there should be more of a bonding between Ozul and Raven because they’ve lived together for 10 years and I think that they should have become closer rather than just lap pillows. I need MOREEEEEE. Also sorry if there are mistakes in my review cause I’m not good at English.

Lots of spelling, lexical and grammatical mistakes.. Sometimes it is hard to understand the meaning of the sentence, often misspelled he/she/his/hers, kind/king etc. A lot of repeatability, repeating words, repeatedly, saying the same again and again, then repeat it. Definitely needs an editor. Story development is something subjectively, it is a bit slow for my liking, but it is a good story and it could raise into something great, while character development is pretty good, yet not too fast or too deep, you can feel the characters and there is a lot of space left for their development.  As for world background 45 chapters deep, I know almost nothing. It's some casual city [suggestion], guess it is something reader has to create while reading. As for stability of updates I have just started yesterday, seeing in early chapters in author notes saying (2 a day, then 10 a week, then 5 a week, 12,4,7,20,1... For god's sake couldn't it be juse when you have time even one a week would be enough if not announced 10 a week. Author (yes actually author) is writing 4-5 or maybe more idk. novels at the same time, not good enough quality even asking for donations under every single chapter. *I am quiting*. Please edit your plain texts, concentrate on one or two novels at a time, keep the good story and chapters, maybe add a single detail either on VR and real world and I will be more than happy to continue reading and donate.

Please can you make a seperate auxiliary chapter for all the illustrations and maps you upload instead of in comment section of chapter . Would be really convenient . Thanks for the novel❤️❤️

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of the fact that whatever had happened to Bell was truly out of her own knowledge and or expertise.

One of my favorite stories to date . Awesome plotline, good progression, amazing characters. Love the MC , only complaint would be I wish there were more scenes between the MC and her love interest . Can't wait to read more !

Overall Everything is Good for now that is at least for me I do hope author read this comment as I want to say is that please do make mc use all his abilities in a useful way because currently he is too OP literally like final boss so rather then going around like some protagonists for finding opportunities to grow in power he should sit in high place and do the manipulating the final boss or villain does . There are lot of ways he can message with protagonists that appears like creating systems for specially that hates those protagonists like 2nd or 3rd rate villain give them opportunities so that they fight protagonists something like that and upgrade his family background to top level and they only listen to him as he keeps his eyes around his maids so that they get opportunity and get stronger and of some hidden people try to something to his plans he would kill them from behind and he can even create clone or something overall I want to say is if he is always in spotlight and people will keep coming to him for messing with him because they don't know his powers at that point it will literally become "slice of life" type story like where mc keep on face slapping while people keep on coming to him as we all know face slapping where mc literally gets into fight with anyone even beggar what I want to say is As mc here is op and like final boss so he should behave like one not go around the world and look for secret realms like protagonists does in typical storyline so they can get stronger.....Well this is just from my prospective hope author you do some think on wether my suggestion is right or wrong it's completely up to you to take it after if in later the novel transform into face slapping novel then I would have no choice but to drop it because I am too tired of slice of life or face slapping novels lately

It's Redlove here! ?.I'm giving myself a positive review. Shameless, I know right...?u200d♀️?u200d♀️ but I hope it's fine with you guys here. As a new writer, I would say I tried for my very first novel. Thanks to all who are engaging in this novel..?. And for those who are just reading and not adding to your library,please do. Leave a review so I can hear your thoughts on this book so I can improve on certain concepts through your feedback and vote as well....✅✅. It would help my book a lot...thanks again