It was fun and has no boring moments. The characters are interesting but would like to have more detailed love scenes! The forbidden affair between brother and sister is kinda weird but also intriguing!
For a first time writing, you tried. Your story development is okay and other things come in place. But you might want to pay keen attention to your dialogues. Its not easy writing, so I must commend you. Good story. Some errors here and there but with some editing and more reading you would improve. Oh and your title, you may want to put a space between the first question mark and the rest.
Hello everyone ^_^ This story is about a guy who does not believe in love because he had a tragic past. But his life gradually changed when he was forced to join a certain club. This is my first story but I assure you that you will not be disappointed! >///<
Echidna : "My, you really are more smart than that I anticipated for. You see, it is just normal to learn these things about the next generations of Greed. I myself am the Witch of Greed. Regulus, is the Sin Archbishop of Greed. It's a completely natural process to learn about your later descendants."
Within 50 years three times the door was formed because the Alliance Union completed the possible preparation of the door formed any time, the impact of the first unobtrusive impact.
