Data and Magic - the data driven approach to save a magical world - Reviews

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Finished chapter 1, can't read more.Needs to be edited properly. It makes sense but it's either the wording or broken sentances that needs to be fixed. Example in chapter 1, " it took much time for humanity...." fix it to " it took a long time for humanity....". Remember to use commas, and don't keep switching between past tense and present tense, it makes reading a nightmare. A tip would be to write a plan or direction of where you want this story to go and then write a timeline of events and/Or conclusions. Don't write they gained control of distant dwarf planets then write how they started the space exploration era, switch the two sentences around and it will make sense. The rest of this is just fillers.Vuvuvucyxychuvuvucucuvuvivcycycucivobohogudydhcivibovivucuctxrxtcuvivibobigucycuvuvivivicuctxtcucuvigivivivivuvucuctxtxtxtxrxtxrxrxezextcyvibobobivucyxtxtxycuvivivivivuvucuctxrxrxycuvuvivivvuvuvuvuvuv

One of the best if not the best original story on this site recommend for all reader that like Op MC, eye power, xanxia, fantasy setting with mage/warrior, op background for M, time/space power , harem

                                                                                                 This novel is decent so far will update if it wins

He went to the zombies that were coming and stabbed them with his stone sword. His eyes were unemotional as he repeatedly stabbed them. Even being a zombie, looking at the boys eyes was a nightmare. His blooded glare scared them, leaving them no option but to retreat.

Ryo coughed harshly as he was thrown back into his cell. He was so weak at this point after three solid weeks of torture he could no longer stand on his own and so had to be carried back to his cell.

Staying there for a while, they felt a reiatsu fluctuation indicating the kid waking up. Yoruichi just rubbed her head on him before she left. Itsuki looked at her leave before he felt Byakuya's reiatsu fluctuating. It seemed to be towards the shrine of penitence where Rukia was currently being held.

"Chunhua is it?" The boy said as he chomped on his fingers, licking them, sucking them before drawing circles on her thigh. She gasped and removed his hand, disgusted.

Yue Clan Spear Technique lv19

"ring can you scan her? is she a demon"

Only shooting stars break the mold

She was looking kind of dumb with her finger and her thumb