First of all, I love Ivan! He's my main man!
His journey is compelling, starting with his hatred for Nexulytes only to become one himself, adding irony and depth to his character.
The Dreamscape's reflection of the real world yet being deadly sets the stage for high-stakes conflicts and explorations, which I'm all up for.
The captivating start immediately grabbed my attention, making me eager to learn more about Ivan. His complex emotions and mysterious newfound abilities are compelling hooks. I hope he finds the answers he's seeking and uncovers the secrets of his talent.
Also, great writing. I'm no grammar master, but I haven’t seen any errors.
Overall, the story has a strong foundation with its unique world-building and character dynamics. With a bit more polish and clearer exposition, it has potential. I love it!!!
