Cultivator in an MMORPG - Reviews

Okay. So firstly. I tried. I really tried to stick with this novel. And give it leeway cus gaming novels are hard with stats and balancing RL and VR. But seriously author. Wtf. Are you even rereading your work? Making notes of past chapters? Planning and outlining? Listening to the reviews?
It’s an amazing concept and the first chapter was excellent. But then it’s just downhill at a ridiculous pace. I would suggest rewriting it from the beginning. But take time and plan. And observe how other novels are done. You need to plan not just the MC development in game and outside. But also the game world. Story line. Skills. And stats. And most importantly. You need to stick to your own details. Also it seems the stats are messing you up terribly so just ignore them and use descriptive and vague words. Allow for auto assignment and development of stats. Plz avoid over done % effects that can stack and fixed damages that will be be no sense when ppl level up their HP. Sure 500 damage is cool at first. But the time the MC is able to use the move his HP is already over 2000 and he isn’t even a tank. Much less later. Also the progression of the stats leveling up is inconsistent and just random. You are doing too much too soon. Overdoing everything. Rewards. Leveling. Masteries. Churning out legendary equipment within the first year of the game when it’s the the second to highest level of equipment with 5 levels under it??? That breaks the game especially since he can’t use the weapons due to his class and rich ppl suddenly own the game.
You need to develop your story. Not just **** it out fast. Take time to fight and learn and grow your character and their world. He is just blazing through time, fights and stats. And it’s boring, inconsistent and useless. He isn’t even OP cus he has so little conflict to show OP ability and has very little impact on the world according to the novel.
So here it is. Final words. Remember that the best stories have cliffhangers due to conflict and real world relations and developments. As well as in game world development and changes. Not everything has to be directly and immediately related to the MC and you don’t have to force time and character progression. Character and world development is more important. A whole chapter on the effects of a players actions can still be epic. Also include more humor and action. The story is too dry. More meat. Even if it means slower chapters and slower time progression. Also you need to decide what type of MC you are going for. A struggling MC with character development. Or an oblivious OP MC with insane luck and skill. Each one will have its own conflict storylines. OP ones mean more comedy and face slapping and will allow for broken dumb luck and unbelievable situations. Although you have to temper it to their character. Sly. Hotheaded. Etc. struggling MC will require more feelings and backstory and inner thoughts. Connections and deep bonds. And finally. You need to have goals. An MC without goals/standards is useless. Even if it’s just to have fun. What is their goal both personally and for the game. And this will affect their choices.
Writing a story isn’t ****** and shouldn’t just be done blindly. Put thought into it and passion. And reread your work. Compare to others of similar genre. Definitely google some writing tips.

Yo buddy good luck for this novel hope you reach many milestones for this.
But just do me a favor don't write his status details in every chapter i think it's just a waste of time and waste of words.
You can just show which skill has leveled up like
Body Refining level up to 9 like that.....or some thing else figure it out.
You can use bold letters or some other format.
If u think it's necessary to show the status page just write it in comment section once you finish the chapter.
I just hope that u can write the status page at every 5 chapters with the details of each skills.
So we read more about the story not just the skills.
I hope you will consider this.

Terrible writing, kill yourself level math. 100.000-85.000=25.000?
would not it be 15,000?
Back to grade school sonny. This is not how to spend ur free time.

Everyone this is just my personal views on this novel.

This novel is awesome and has a lot of potential to be with the top 50.If you like mmorpg martial gamer then i bet you will like this novel because of the similarities  like clans in modern world and a runaway from his clan. So its quite similar also i think it has the game mechanics like 100% completion rate stuff like that so I guess it is inspired by that novel.

Author pls dont spam his Attributes its annoying also pls do this to your attributes 50 --- 68 so we wont get confused of what changed. I hope that you will post a stable update for us and Good Luck writing this novel.

The story has a decent premise but is totally destroyed by unbelievable details.

Author please slow down.  Take your time.  There is no need to rush.  

The numbers used are impossible to believe.  For example, the idea that only one person would spawn in a particular village out of 6 in the most popular game of its time is...hard to swallow?  The MC completes one relatively easy quest (done in under 30 seconds) to gain...about 5+ game changing and completely different rewards.  The entire world map is explored (except locked zones) by day 2 making this game incredibly small.  I could go on but I think you get the point.  There might be a real gem of a novel here as the basic premise is good.  However, I'll never know as all of the details are just so jarringly wrong that I am unable to keep reading this.  

Author please consider finding an editor to help pick up on details like I mentioned as well as the frequent issues with grammar, especially punctuation.

Very good the novel recommends to everyone to follow, you will not regret it.

Very good the novel recommends to everyone to follow, you will not regret it.

love the story so far keep up the good work don't lest people get you down
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I can't believe there are so many bad reviews that you guys made this rated as (3.1). My real rating would be a 4.5 but I will make a 5.0 to try to balance the rating. The story is very cool and I can't wait to see what happens next. The story went a little too fast for a story and could use some filler but overall I love it!

The story is good but the Asura is to overpowered. If his opponents were just asking strong then it'd be better. Don't take this wrong, it's a good novel and keep up the work.

I loved it and hope to see more in the future! math is a bit wonky but if you look past it its a wonderful story that you could take a chill afternoon to read

great

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