I am only in the first chapter but I will still review it.So, the story thus far is interesting as the plot progresses as your storytelling gets people intrigued, but the grammar breaks the moments, unquestionably focus on your writing as it may cause the readers to lose interest quite fast.Tip - there is something called 'showing, not telling', you don't tell your readers, you 'show' them.Example, you don't write, "He is angry," you 'show' them, by "He gritted his teeth," the readers will 'feel' the emotions of the characters by reading through, just saying "he is angry," doesn't excite anyone, but a pretty good novel.Pretty short for my normal reviews. Be optimistic, that's what a Novelist strive for.